tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498024274048527632.post8115041405439742275..comments2024-03-28T07:22:57.503+00:00Comments on PINBUNS: Film Review - Le Voyage dans la Lunev vbc bchttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08792908463852152970noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498024274048527632.post-16046590285358712862014-09-25T16:45:51.197+01:002014-09-25T16:45:51.197+01:00Oh gosh, I completely overlooked the do's and ...Oh gosh, I completely overlooked the do's and dont's guide. I must have been too distracted by the creative partnerships list.<br /><br />Thank you for the feedback. I must admit my conscience was thinking "There is no doubt that this film has become an inspiration for many, many people" was a cop-out way to address a large portion of viewers in a short time. Time to brush the dust off and get back into the swing of backing up statements with evidence properly!<br />v vbc bchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08792908463852152970noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498024274048527632.post-21307160584177790302014-09-25T16:42:03.630+01:002014-09-25T16:42:03.630+01:00Thank you for the feedback, I'm glad you enjoy...Thank you for the feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed it!<br /><br />I was wondering as I read over the review why it sounded slightly unprofessional and off. I had the mindset of "drive it into the viewer's head that I'm confident with what I believe so it's convincing" but I was probably approaching it in a very "English essay" type of way. - Rather than a review. I'll act on what you've said for my next review, thank you! v vbc bchttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08792908463852152970noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498024274048527632.post-25690177738667078712014-09-25T06:45:42.986+01:002014-09-25T06:45:42.986+01:00Hi Ella!
Ha, Phil has beaten me to it :)
I reall...Hi Ella!<br /><br />Ha, Phil has beaten me to it :)<br /><br />I really enjoyed reading this review, and would go along with what Phil has suggested and have another look at the do's and don'ts guide. As well as avoiding the generalisations, also try and avoiding using 'I'... you don't do it very often in this piece, but when you do, it takes it away from being objective and it becomes subjective. So for example you say 'After seeing the famous image of the moon with a face I had immediately started to see references from many other films and animations,' which could easily be changed to 'After seeing the famous image of the moon with a face, one can immediately start to see references from many other films and animations.'<br /><br />Just a couple of other minor pointers...always make sure that your film names are italicised; this becomes important when you are dealing with a character name as a film title, such as King Kong - you can end up with some very odd sounding sentences otherwise! :) <br />Also, make sure that you link your images to the text, so for example, say 'The first notable one being the Moon from Soul Eater. – Soul Eater being Japanese(fig 4). This avoids any confusion when you have multiple images.<br /><br />Looking forward very much to your next review!Jackiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13332181835614441447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8498024274048527632.post-32007940099544477612014-09-24T23:25:04.961+01:002014-09-24T23:25:04.961+01:00*personally there is only so far you can go with t...*personally there is only so far you can go with throwing Michael Bay into the mix without ruining the tone and personality in a film*<br /><br />Michael Bay = :(<br /><br />Good to see this done and dusted - and approached so thoughtfully. So a couple of pointers to take forwards: I uploaded a 'do's and dont's' guide on the group blog which I hope you've had a chance to browse and absorb - one of the principles is avoid generalisations, for example:<br /><br />*There is no doubt that this film has become an inspiration for many, many people* - now, while this is true, this statement is actually a generalisation; firstly you suggest that categorically there is 'no doubt' and then you go on to say that it has inspired 'many, many people' - the problem here is that in academic, evidence-based writing, you need to avoid generalisations. Unless you've surveyed the entire world on whether or not the film has indeed inspired 'many, many people', you can't say 'there is no doubt'. What you can do is evidence the idea of its importances by finding a published source that attests to its influence on filmmakers - don't assert it's influence on your say so, prove it on the combined say-so of others. Use quotes proactively in this way - to scaffold and lend authority to your observations.<br /><br />Good to see you knitting between the film and its visual influences in other forms of entertainment.<br />tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com